The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/08
With 3 grandsons in baseball, I could feel the tension of the batter and the crowd. We often attend their games, and sometimes I think I'm more nervous than they are when they're up to bat with bases loaded and 2 outs. Yeah--I truly identified with this one. Fun story and right on topic.
Oh man.. I was hanging on every word, straining to see, wanting him to slam a homerun. Whoever wrote this is a baseball player! WOW.
What a great choice of subject for "patience." I was at the game and cheering for the batter to have patience. Great story.
08/31/08
Fun situation and I had to stop myself from reading ahead :) As for adding more of Walt's thoughts, I think you did such a great job with keeping the flow and suspense I didn't miss it. Great piece!
08/31/08
Love this! Love the MC and the descriptions of the at bat moments. I suspect, though, that this is the very thing that turns non-baseball fans off to the game...too bad they can't see all the intricacies, which you did an excellent job of providing! Go Tribe! (Sorry about that...got into the game.)
08/31/08
This really engaged the senses. I was expecting a home run, but as the man said, a walk was sufficient. Well done.
09/01/08
I like this! I know next to nothing about baseball, but you made it possible to understand what was going on and why. I liked the humility that went along with the patience. He took orders and held back from the hit he wanted, and he put the needs of the team before personal glory. It works on many levels.
09/04/08
Congratulations on your high placing! An Editor's Choice!!!! Woo hoo, you got 'er done!
09/04/08
Congratulations on your EC. Being a huge baseball fan (I'm watching a game right now), I was on the edge of my seat with each pitch. You did a great job showing the intensity of the moment. And very creative take on the topic.
09/04/08
Congrats on the EC - I always enjoy a good sports story, and your ending was definitely not predictable.
09/05/08
I loved this! What a great illustration of the topic, too. Congrats on your EC!
09/06/08
Your creativity with the topic is great! Super congrats on your EC!!
09/26/08
...now all I need a hot dog and a Coke. :)
09/26/08
I mean, now all I need IS a hot dog and a Coke. :)

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