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Oh dear...I want to read the rest of the story! I hope there's a happy ending.
You inspire such sympathy for you MC in this sad story. Well written.
Oh my! This is so incredibly sad! I click on the title think it would be a memory like from the little house books where Almanzo puts his popcorn in his glass of milk, but this was heart-breaking! I felt so much for this darling little girl. Excellent writing, you made me want to read more. ^_^
Excellent, excellent writing. Your words are so descriptive. You really involved me in this sad tale. Great job.
I felt the little girl's pain and hope there's happier days ahead. I liked the line about the smirk on aunty's face ruining her perfect look. Great imagery. Good read.
I SO want more of the story here. My heart breaks for this child. Super writing.
You tapped into my emotions so i could feel the sadness of the child. Well done.
Excellent writing.
You have a God-given gift!
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