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Cool title and interesting story!! I felt like I was reading back during Sci-Fi week! :) Your piece has good suspense and a sobering quality to it. Good job!
Very good. Nice ending. (Where's the next chapter?)
Really got ino this story, and it ended too quickly...I demand more! The medic was two clicks away...poor guy. Great details and description, kept me on the edge of my seat.
This is very well written. It's plot has a lot of impact.
I was definitely captivated. Excellent job.
Good action, well paced. I really enjoyed this, and loved the ending. Kudos!
A good story with lots of sci-fi suspense, yet with a message, and what is next?
NICE twist ending! I loved that!

I had a bit of a tough time placing their setting, but it's a very minor complaint. This was very well written, and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks and good luck!
Very good story! Your story held my interest from beginning to end.
A sci-fi adventure, eh? Very fun! I loved the character of Juan's brother. What an amazing piece of writing. I wish it would go on so I could see what happens next if the two brothers ever meet up again and what happens when they find him in the cave. Excellent stuff. ^_^
Love the creative title and the story delivered! Fantastic writing!
Excellent writing, Sandy. You have a wonderful ability to set the stage and draw the reader in. Loved the ending. As noted in other comments, it begs for more. Congrats!