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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)
Whassup bro? Wanna hang out?
Can't right now, I'll give you a shout

Later bro. You got stuff to do
Check you out when you get through

Wait, maybe you could give me a hand
I'm looking for stuff for my old man

Hey gimme a break, that's all jive
You don't even know if your dad's alive

And even before he went away
You never got him nothing for Father's Day

Chill out bro, I ain't talking 'bout him
Whatcha thinkin', do I look that dim?

I'm talkin' 'bout my Holy Dad
Who loves me even when I'm bad

I didn't believe, but he was watchin' my back
When I was dealing drugs and smokin' crack

Now I'm straight and got some bling
But what can I get someone who's got everything?

Man, don't you ever read His Word?
Let me remind you, I know you've heard

Our Father tells us what he wants done
In Mark 12, 30 and 31

Love the Lord with all your heart
You can't buy that at the Super Wal Mart

And love your neighbor as yourself
You can't pull that off the appliance shelf

Check it out dude, you're getting close
What was that part about sheep and goats?

I think it was in Matthew 25
Time to make that scripture come alive!

We'll hit up the stores for food and drinks
Some jeans and shirts, but it ain't what you think

We can't shop for Him, if we want to please
We gotta give something to the least of these

Hop in the car, we'll head for skid row
We'll show em that somebody loves em, bro

Once we got started, it wasn't that hard
To make a really awesome Father's Day card

We praise You Dad up there on Your throne!
For the greatest ever single parent home.
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Member Comments
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Date
Leigh MacKelvey
05/24/07
Yo Yo, Dog! Really unique and a great message. I could the beat-boxing!
Jacquelyn Horne
05/24/07
This is very good. It would help to somehow separate who is speaking each time. Maybe italics for one speaker? But the message is very good and well taken.
Dixie Phillips
05/24/07
Yo, Bro! Let the drums roll.
It's a hit for sho'!
Maxx .
05/25/07
I love it! Faithwriters Rap! good work! This is a keeper!
Cassie Memmer
05/25/07
Great rap, great message. You and another rapper here should sell your pieces to a Christian rapper. Awesome!
Sharon Henderson
05/25/07
I can't stand rap...LOVED THIS! Good work! Great message!
Rhonda Clark
05/25/07
I love this. Livin' in Mimphus, I can relate.

Great job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 
05/25/07
Thanks for a rap that I could listen to!
Donna Powers
05/30/07
Amusing but a wonderful message contained in an unusual way. Thanks for sharing it
Joanne Sher 
05/30/07
What a fun voice - and that last line is an absolute keeper. I'm sure you enjoyed writing this one.
TJ Nickel
05/30/07
I liked the boldness of going with a rap theme, the commentary and message in the article, as well as Scriptural references without all the details. Nice work. My suggestion with it being a 'rap' would be to include a chorus and to string the lines together in a different scheme. The piece went start to finish, but I felt the art of the piece itself was only just beginning.
Patty Wysong
05/30/07
Oh, wow! That's really making things understandable.
dub W
05/30/07
Flat out kewl. A fun way to say a tribute to the Father. Thanks.
Rita Garcia
05/30/07
Fantastic in every way!
Loren T. Lowery
05/30/07
Personally, I don't like/understand rap...but this piece just might help change my mind.
Great message in lyrical form and oh so creative.
Fun and wonderful at the same time.
Pat Guy
05/30/07
Oh Al ... I should have known this was yours the first time around.

Enjoyed it even more the second ... I think it's a classic!
Bryan Coomes
05/31/07
So obviously I was grabbed by the title, but somehow thought that it wouldn't be actual rappin' So all I can say is..."Yo piece was whack, straight up off da heezie fo shizzle"...which loosely translated means...That was a really exceptional poem comprised of poignant expressions and meaningful messages. :)