The Official Writing Challenge
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01/14/07
Beautiful little scenes drawn together beautifully. This was wonderfully done.
01/16/07
Yes, you do very well with dialoque. And I love the last line.
01/16/07
Beautiful--touching and sweet. I enjoyed this a lot (around the lump in my throat).
01/16/07
Yes - this is beautiful. The teaspoon part was my favorite - so in character.

Last line is a winner too. I'm glad I read this.
01/16/07
I like how the ending ties together all the memories. Great job.
01/17/07
Nice dialog, and interesting to read all the way through.
01/17/07
So sweet and so sad. I loved the last line Even to the very last slice. This story pulled at my heartstrings. Thanks for sharing.
01/17/07
Loved how you slipped the memories in and the emotions they each had! Good job of writing!
01/18/07
Excellent work Tim, without over-sentimentalizing things.
01/18/07
Beautiful job. I'm so glad I read this, thanks.