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This story has a smell of authenticity about it - you have believablely "got under the skin" of this character's motivations and thoughts. If I was being critical ... and I will be because this is posted in L4, the "moral" and the "theology" were just a little heavy handed. A slightly less "preachy" feel would have got your point across better---still, I'm not the one to talk! Thank you for sharing this.
This was very heavy. I like the descriptions, but it seemed rushed. Maybe if the pace and flow were changed.

Very interesting and definately creative.

Amen. Thank God for all of our public servants and families. I was glad the officer in your story survived. God bless.
Well written & very creative!