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08/17/06
Neat way to tell the story. A couple of little items hit me: "angels" instead of "angles" and "bizarre" instead of "bazaar". Good job.
08/18/06
I especially enjoyed the often true and powerful message in the last stanza: "He whispered on those mountaintops, But shouts down in my pain."
08/19/06
I enjoyed this, especially the last stanza.
08/22/06
What a wonderful tribute - this was moving from beginning to end. Also loved the final stanza.
08/22/06
Absolutely lovely and sad at the same time, yet so overcoming. I, like the rest of the comments, adore the last stanza. It is an attitude we should all have. Blessings on a wonderful poem.
Good way to tell a life story from the perspective of difficult changes that lead to, of all things, "No reason to complain." Good message. I stumbled a bit over "angle" rather than "angel" - an easily fixed thing. Would love to sit down and visit w/ your mother and soak up some of her wisdom. :-)

Congratulations on your win, Venice. I love poetry and enjoyed your poem's story a lot. A fine tribute to your mother. My mother died at 84, 5 years ago, and I miss her wise words more than ever. Writing about our loved ones is to honor them according to God's commandments and a blessing to all who read such defining words of love. Yours in Christ, Karne