The Official Writing Challenge
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07/25/16
Very nice entry. Interesting and touching story about family. Always one my favorite subjects.
Thanks.
07/27/16
Oh, this sounds like fun! I like how you gave the MC a child's POV. There were a few places where you could have tightened more with less explanation or empty dialogue. Don't underestimate your reader. I loved your last line and your title.
07/27/16
You wrote a delightful story. Since imbibing isn't answered, it could have been left out and not ruin the integrity of your story. I really enjoyed reading it.