The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/10
I think I recognize the writing style here. This was chilling in a subtle way ... you did a good job of portraying that poor girl's emotional state.
This was heartbreaking from the first paragraph on. I could empathize with the MC and there were certainly several emotions addressed. I did want to know some more, I thought I wasn't going to know what happened to the sister, but then at the end it was obvious. You did a good job with a difficult topic.
09/04/10
You nailed the emotion of the category. You teased me from paragraph to paragraph wanting to know where you were leading me. You made the scene very visual and real. I didn't see the ending coming. Great job! God bless.
I could feel the knots in her stomach. It's hard to write something like this with a 750 word limit. You had me right all the way through. Good job.