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Poignant story...well written.
04/13/09
Your title is great for this story that definitely tugs at the heart strings. Your dialog is excellent. You are a very skilled writer implying so much without saying it. (my daughter's name is Sherah… I'm sure pronounced the same as your MC's). :)
04/15/09
Heart-felt and poignant. I loved this.
Very good. I could relate to this. Nice job.
04/15/09
ahh..so touching!

I liked the analogy of the cage.
A real tug-of-war of emotions going on here; and to me this phrase set up the story to let the reader know what they were in for : "I watched her as long as I could bear it, and because I cared for her, I let it go."

Both seemed pulling and letting go - so much like life itself - so real. The emotions so tangible. Great job!
This beautifully written and tense with emotion piece pulled me in and held on.
04/16/09
Wowwww, love this. SOOOOO well-written, and I was totally pulled in.
04/21/09
I love your writing. Another great piece infused with emotion.