The Official Writing Challenge
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I couldn't stop reading this one. Great story indeed.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

07/20/06
Gripping and well-written.
07/20/06
The power of His Name! Gripping story!
07/20/06
Great story, well done.
07/21/06
Very good, but I was distracted by so many ... and not sure if all the punctuation with them was correct, BUT your action and dialogue was great and you stayed on topic nicely!:)
07/21/06
Very captivating and intense.

"Phil Cowlie suffered no ill affects from that night terror except a bed saturated by perspiration." If that had been me, the bed would have been saturated all right, just not by perspiration. Good writing.
07/21/06
Okay, first of all, loved the story! Fast paced, exciting. Great job of holding my interest! Now to address the comment above this one. George, you kill me!!! Sheets wet with something other than persperation! I'm sorry, I had to say something! Eeewwwww! ;)
07/21/06
This was highly entertaining! I don't think you need the last two sentences "wrapping" everything up for the readers. The mood switch is too abrupt and anti-climactic. The rest of the story was gripping and fascinating.
07/21/06
GOOD STORY. Kept me reading. My only comment is that I couldn't pick up on the essence (soul) of the story. A few scriptures came to my mind while reading it, and at the end I came up with a few different tie ins to SOUL. I just think it is important in these short essays, that a writer hammer home the message they are trying to minister, of coare the more creaive the better. In your story you paint a picture of a man's soul reacting to spiritual attack. I would have preferred to read something that said that. Now thats just how I look at it. All that said, you are a very talented writer. God Bless.
07/21/06
GOOD STORY. Kept me reading. My only comment is that I couldn't pick up on the essence (soul) of the story. A few scriptures came to my mind while reading it, and at the end I came up with a few different tie ins to SOUL. I just think it is important in these short essays, that a writer hammer home the message they are trying to minister, of coare the more creaive the better. In your story you paint a picture of a man's soul reacting to spiritual attack. I would have preferred to read something that said that. Now thats just how I look at it. All that said, you are a very talented writer. God Bless.