The Official Writing Challenge
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Gosh I could identify with this! I have been there and heart that voice!
Great writing!
A Davey for true communication.

Wow! What a first. I could feel the agony. Can't wait for more. Kudos! Hats off and all that.
You're too hard on yourself, Joe, this is good stuff. You absolutely captured the raw emotions here. My only suggestion would be to tighten up the meter a bit, but this is a very creditable first poem, with many wonderful phrases and images.
Joe, I can't wait to see what you come up with, with a little practice. Goo job. I really liked it.
It has good meaning, it probably needs to be restructured and more attention to pace paid.
Powerful pictures and emotions here, along with strong concepts: "The peace of knowing what was unknown." Back when I started writing verse, I would have welcomed any sign of the emotional freedom and heart-flow I see here!

You've already received some solid critiquing, so I won't nitpick here. It'll be exciting to watch your poetry grow, Joe! (Hmm, nice rhyme...)