The Official Writing Challenge
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A very sad but intriguing story. Although I'm not sure how it will measure up to the judges view of the Personal Peace topic, it is still a well told story. Good job.
Wow! If this had a tiny bit more closure for the reader it would have a double Wow!

Fantastic writing, voice and everything. The reader knows the father dies - but to shoot himself is too sad and hopeless for us! Maybe he could have called the room too late or something, and then mumbled a 'Not now.' to his daughter, still not ready to surrender.

I loved this read! It ALMOST made me cry. Wow!
Not being in the middle of all the angst of divorced parents is personal peace. As gritty as this story is, things like this do happen. A friend of mine lost both parents the same week. It was rough.

This was heartbreaking to read, but made me want to hug my mom. Thanks for that:-) Great writing with an unexpected ending!