The Official Writing Challenge
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What a great narrative! I'm certain that there was something in your spirit that really spoke to those young men, and if you were to see them again, I'll bet you could reach even deeper into their lives.

This is just personal preference, but I think you could do without the opening paragraph, and also end it with "...good over evil result." You did such a compelling job with the story, that the "preaching" isn't necessary--we got the message. Very, very good.
This is dynamite! I'm so glad to read it and see how the Lord led one person to stand in the gap and make a difference in two, possibly three, lives. Your writing style makes me want to read more, too. Thanks so much!