The Official Writing Challenge
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A happy story with a happy ending. I assume it is a true story, as miracles do happen. God Bless.
You had lots more words; I'd like to see this expanded, so that we get to know your character better. As it was, it felt rushed. A wonderful reminder, though, of God's perfect timing.
I wanted to know more about what she decided to do after her she would play out her gratitude to God!

A miraculous story that could be flushed out to become captivating! :-)
You have an exciting story here that could be developed into so much more! I hope you stretch it out and include more than you did watchful of some of your punctuation too. But overall... you write well:)