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Such a beautiful, well written testimony to the topic of fulfillment! One can just feel it through this writer's words as she contemplated her destiny on the overpass, the bridge....exceptionally well done!
You did a marvelous job of capturing your narrator's despair. Your sentence "Well then. What have you lost?" is absolutely breath-taking. One minor quibble, and a suggestion: The second word should be "were", and I think you could eliminate the past paragraph, which is almost anti-climactic. Your point is made--and beautifully--in the paragraph before that one. One of the better stories of this type that I've read.
You painted a beautiful picture of Jesus loving us in the midst of our pain. He always offers a way of escape from temptation doesn't he. Good writing!
A supernatural, but believable, visitation!!! Liked this line: "I was blissfully trapped by divine logic: What had I lost? It was simple, heavenly math."

Been there. Awesome!
Dear Sherry, It's been more than a decade, and I'm surprised I missed this story of yours until now (popping back to retrieve my poem "The Secret Place (A Soldier's Dream)" to share on Facebook for Veterans Day). As I remembered how much I appreciated all your lovely comments on my writing, I wanted to check to see how you are. I agree with the other commenters, how real this encounter with Jesus comes through your writing. I love it and, since it sounds like something autobiographical, I can join in agreeing with another commenter, I too understand that heart-wrenching sense of never being able to recover from the loss of a hope-filled promise. God bless you, dear friend!