The Official Writing Challenge
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Jesus is the greatest hero!
I would drop the first sentence as it doesn't relate to the rest of the story. I would also find a stronger hook to pull the reader in. SHOW the woman's emotion. Put the reader right into her heart. Get the reader to feel her pain, her disappointment, her last desperate attempt at wholeness. THEN, show JESUS in all his COMPASSION to rock the reader's world, to embrace Jesus as the ONLY healer! God SO rox!!
This could be brushed up a little and would make a powerful devotional.