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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: PUNCH (08/27/20)
“Class, the real ‘punch’ comes when those who hated, persecuted and tortured Jesus to death realised that they had failed. He was not in the tomb and despite the guards and the stone that they had placed to stop the disciples robbing his body. Their actions were incidental. The guards were asleep when Jesus left the sealed tomb. {Matthew 28: 1-6}

Why? Because God the Father needed Jesus to die, so He did. God wanted Him raised from the dead, so He was. For me, the main punch or impact of Jesus coming and dying is that He walked out of the grave alive. The stone was rolled away, by the power of God.”

“Miss Ford.” asked Jimmy “ did any of his disciples help him?”

“No,” she said “ they were so terrified that they were hiding in a locked upper room but the women who were his friends were not afraid. They went to the grave.”

“So here is another ‘punch’, she continued.
Thomas openly doubted that Jesus had risen from the dead until he had definite undeniable proof. ‘Eight days later, His disciples were once again inside with the doors locked, and Thomas was with them. Jesus came and stood among them and said, “Peace be with you.” Jesus said to Thomas, ”Put your finger here and look at My hands. Reach out your hand and put it into My side. Stop doubting and believe.”
Thomas replied, “My Lord and my God!”
{John 20: 27 - 28]

“Can you imagine what it was like to see Him alive and to see the nail marks on his hands and the wound on His side where the soldier had pierced Him?”

“I would have passed out,” squawked Millie

“So now class,” Miss Ford said with a smile “Resurrection brought it all together. Now, it all makes sense! All the suffering and agony created a way out. His resurrection broke the hold that sin had over us. Through His death and resurrection, we have been set free. No longer slaves to sin but children of God”.
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Barbara Lynn Culler 
09/04/20
You have the start of a good story here. I felt like I was coming in on the middle of your piece. It would have worked better had you started with eye-catching sentence showing who you were talking to and why this particular lesson. Keep on writing!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/06/20
You make some great points. Some experts state you should never start with dialog because the reader might feel like she's coming in the middle of something. I don't always agree, but in this case, it took almost three paragraphs before I knew who the speaker was and to whom she was speaking. Just by adding some body language and a name can make a huge difference. Although generally defining the topic word is discouraged, in this case the teacher could ask for suggestions of different definitions of punch or different sentences where it means something different. By doing this, a student could tell about Jesus, which for kids' stories, having the kid, not the adult, resolve the conflict or have an epiphany is much more desirable. It'd also make it not feel like you were forcing the topic word. Sometimes the best on-topic stories never use the topic word.

However, you did a lot of things right. You picked some great Scriptures and presented them in a way that wasn't too preachy or too soon in the story. You had the kids ask some great questions too. You definitely have a clear Christian message. While you used the topic word a bit too much for my taste, you were on topic in a fresh and different way. Most importantly, I can really feel your passion. I've no doubt the Holy Spirit is punching you to spread the wonders of the Word. 😉