The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your story. However, the shift of point of view took away from the story. It begins with "You", but then shifts to I/we. For me, it would be better to stick with first person "I."

I do like the way you set the scene of the floor mats. Without saying it, you let the reader know the general age of the child. That was well done!
Excellent! Loved this story!
I found the point of view a little awkward, but a story with a great message.
I enjoyed the story.Thank you.