The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story! I knew from the start who was the speaker, and it did not disappoint!
12/07/19
A good story, and so true! No one has ever jumped "all in" more than Jesus.
12/07/19
Beautiful and interesting account of God's work with humanity.

On the dialogue portion, I think it would be good to have a few more indicators of which character is speaking. I don't think it would give too much away to refer to the first character as the King and would then help to distinguish who is nodding and who is speaking.
12/12/19
Congrats on this 5th place overall finish!
Doug,

Congratulations on 5th place in EC.

You really engage your reader right away.

This story was formatted scout was easier to read.

Well written.
12/14/19
Congrats on your EC! Well done.