The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/19
Great title. This type of sin is something so many of us can relate to. I love the parallels to the flames the character was in, and what hell might actually feel like. I love how you brought Jesus into the picture so easily. The analogy was amazing. I really enjoyed this piece!
11/21/19
I'm sure this is great writing. I couldn't read it. With vision issues, I need white space between paragraphs. Just a little input.
11/21/19
Oh, you touched my heart with tears in my eyes! Blessed story-telling.
11/21/19
Good job!
Amazing story! It was hard to read though, being so crammed together. It would be better to break up the paragraphs and separate the lines of dialogue. This was a great analogy!
11/28/19
This is powerfully written. The imagery and message will linger with your readers. Great job.
11/28/19
This is powerfully written. The imagery and message will linger with your readers. Great job.
Doug,

I really liked your twist on the topic. This was a compelling read.

I might have deleted the "thank you" at the end.

Catchy Title. Great dialogue.

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I better you may have placed higher if the story had been easier to read.

One of my favorites of the week.
Doug,

I really liked your twist on the topic. This was a compelling read.

I might have deleted the "thank you" at the end.

Catchy Title. Great dialogue.

If you hit the preview button, you can reformat your story before submitting.

You might try preview again to ensure changes took place.

I better you may have placed higher if the story had been easier to read.

One of my favorites of the week.