The Official Writing Challenge
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I love your analogy to the relationship. I can imagine that the dried fruit would resemble a can of worms - very graphic image!
08/29/19
I like the analogy very much. You could tighten up the writing a bit and develop it a wee bit further. Good reading, though!
09/02/19
This is a great start.

I really feel like this could have been made into more of a story, with the focus being on the relationship. Take the POV of the friend, and actually tell the story. I think that might be more effective.

The analogy is a good one, and a good reminder.