The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 113 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
08/22/19
What an interesting account. I had never heard of Liele before. Thank you for writing this in such an interesting way.
You told a very interesting historical story and bringing it to life. I'm a bit confused as to where the topic comes in, though I did see he needed to hurry. Your descriptions and dialoging made it very real to me.
Wow what a great story. I wasn't sure at first if it was my "type" of story, but you grabbed me a few paragraphs in and held me to the very end. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 12th overall. Happy Dance!
I definitely see the topic in this piece. It's splattered all over it from the rush in the beginning to the war to the life of a slave to getting freed from jail to being an endentured servant. You don't need to use the topic word for it to be infused throughout. I just wanted to add that to my above comment. Congratulations again.