The Official Writing Challenge
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This scene is so tragic. My mom has friends that have kids who give them little attention. I usually wonder what happened to cause them not to want to be around their mother. Great job!
05/10/19
This is both heartbreaking and beautiful. To see two friends, roommates at a facility can be such comfort. This carries powerful life lessons about priorities and family. Love LOVE it! I hope it does well this week.
Such a bittersweet story and one that too often is true. You told it well. Thank you for sharing.
This is a beautiful piece. You did a great job developing the characters in such a short space. I was just asking someone yesterday, who was upset that her husband and kids forgot mother's day, what she did for her mother. Often are actions are bigger seeds than any words can be. You've done a fantastic job of showing that in this touching piece.
05/14/19
So many characters and, yet, you did a great job describing each of them so that I knew them quite well. And they all played a part in the story. Excellent dialogue and story-telling.
This is a beautiful story. I really like how you ended the sadness on a positive note. I hope this rates as well with the judges as it does with me!
Nicely done. Blessings
Congratulations on ranking 16th overall! Happy Dance!