The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/19
Oh I loved this entire entry...it touched my heart.

Excellent, free flowing and such a great read. Of course I love anything that has "animals" in it.

So many of us speak to our "fur babies" --- they are a great "ear" for us aren't they?

Thanks for sharing,
Blessings~

This is a darling story. I talk to animals all day long so I could totally relate. The exchange made me smile.
Be careful of POV shifts. You had one spot where you jumped into the dog's thoughts. Instead of saying the dog had no idea, try something like: Kiki licked Angela's face and cocked her head. Even her ears perked up. Angela giggled and thought, <i> It's like you're trying to decipher my words.</i>
This is all from Angela's POV, describing what she sees through body language, dialog, and thoughts.

Overall though, you've done an awesome job. The ending was great. I especially like how you included the prayer because not everyone knows how to pray.
03/17/19
It's the little things that we take for granted that are reminders of our blessed lives. Great piece of writing that moved the reader along swiftly. Well done.
Cute story! Amazing how our pets can help us sort out our feelings!