The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job. There were a lot of things I could relate to.
Such a relatable and heartwarming story. It flows nicely and has great descriptions! It felt very true. I could see the family in my mind's eye as I was reading. Wonderful job.
Excellent job with the topic in content and delivery.
Well done,
I loved your analogy of loneliness like a cloak wrapped around you. Very descriptive.
This is a great story. I can relate to so many parts both when I left home and when all three of my kids went to college. A couple of minor things: the plural of goodbye is goodbyes (no apostrophe), Dad should start with a capital when being used as a name, and there are no spaces on either side of an em dash--but those are little things. You did a fine job with the topic and you pulled me into the story. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 12 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.