The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/19
I liked these lines a lot: "I’m feeling lost and it’s only Monday morning." "These little landmarks anchor my week..." I liked the sound of "I’m going to live unhurried, with peace and purpose." It rolls well. Structurally, the shift from "I" to "we" in the third and fourth paragraphs robbed the piece of some of its strength. The shift back to "I" was odd, in that the remainder of the piece focused on what you need, rather than insights you have to offer the reader. Made it sound self-centered. On a personal note, good luck with this time of transition in your life. I happen to be on that same stretch of road myself... Thanks for sharing this.
I liked your intro-attention getting!
02/13/19
Nice job with this piece, great delivery and content.

God bless~
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