The Official Writing Challenge
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I am so deeply moved by your story, by this record of your experience. Surely there is no one who would not be grieved by what you write unless they do not have a heart that beats like that baby's heart. I believe your story needs to be widely publicized and so the ending of this article needs to be prayed over and re-written. It fizzles out. The ending IS the truth and does have SOME impact, but what if the ending was as unforgettable as the experience you describe. Equal weight - sort of. It needs to STICK. The ending didn't register with me because my eyes glazed over the ending while my heart was still literally beating real hard processing the description of the jar's contents. I don't know if I am making myself clear or not. Pray about it...the Lord will show you if what I am saying is His idea or not. You have a rare experience to share. I'd have it edited (professionally, here on FaithWriters is good)as many times as it takes for it to have maximum impact, and then submit it to Christian magazines. Get the message out. God bless you sister.
12/16/18
This is a moving story written with honesty and vulnerability. You might think about sharing this piece with 'Emily's Voice', an organization that supports pregnant women who are considering abortion. Thank you for sharing.
12/19/18
I agree 100% with Claudia. Refine this testimony until the gold comes to the surface.