The Official Writing Challenge
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Just WOW. I couldn't stop reading it. If it was longer it would be a true page turner for me. Great story line. I think you needed a comma instead of a semi-colon at the end of the first paragraph, but as long as her "Sister" is doing THAT, the semi-colon can slide. I'm inspired. Nice job.
12/16/18
This one left a lump in my throat and a deep ache in my heart. It was very moving and compelling. Great work.
12/18/18
Great story for the topic and subtle reminder of how Jesus' voice strengthens us to walk the difficult journey. Nice writing!
12/19/18
Wonder-full story. One suggestion: 'off the cuff prayer' doesn't fit in this scene. Maybe breath prayers?