The Official Writing Challenge
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Your points were good, but for me, it didnt flow smoothly. Your first paragraph was a good opening and piqued my curiostiity...I was hopeing to find a new way of overcoming that same dilema that we all struggle with at times. But then I got lost. Still, your overall message is true and good.
*hoping
What if everyone who posted in Challenge entries also commented on/critiqued at least three others? I'm shocked that so many post, and so few read and post a review for others. It seems only a few people have the courtesy to critique but would like the critiques on their own. I am new here, and originally was excited about this site. If you are one who DOES regularly read and comment on others work, then may the Lord bless you mightily and publish you quickly.
11/24/18
Your opening stated our dilemma well. But try as I might, I don't get what Obadiah or Uriah Heep have to say that addresses that dilemma. I don't know what to specifically suggest, but those paragraphs just didn't work for me. Maybe just eliminate them? Sorry. . . I'm not much help.