The Official Writing Challenge
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Yes...I hear you. very good analogy. Condensed would make a good childrens picture book with the feel of John Bunyan's Pilgrims Progress. Scare the kids out of their wits when they're young so they'll always remember. The Bible says to SNATCH some out of the fire. This would help them to REALLY understand, especially if the waterfall came about all of a sudden when they weren't expecting it. POW! They might even cry! Seriously a good way to snatch some out of the fire. It would give them ears to hear. The Lord would remind them of the story once they were grown.
And I would definitely buy the book!
What if everyone who posted in Challenge entries also commented on/critiqued at least three others? I'm shocked that so many post, and so few read and post a review for others. It seems only a few people have the courtesy to critique but would like the critiques on their own. I am new here, and originally was excited about this site. If you are one who DOES regularly read and comment on others work, then may the Lord bless you mightily and publish you quickly.
11/24/18
Very descriptive, original take on the subject. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I suppose your parents on the shore were the lifeline, but I think I would have somehow made Jesus a llifeline, even on the very brink of the waterfall.
I love your original lateral thinking.
Looking forward to more.
11/26/18
An adult approach to the rebellious journeyor, recognizing the pull of your parents' correction, but choosing instead to follow the dangerous path of many. It's not only the dangerous path, but the path which brings unhappiness.