The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a brilliant piece of work, that is so moving and powerful. Thank you.
What if everyone who posted in Challenge entries also commented on/critiqued at least three others? I'm shocked that so many post, and so few read and post a review for others. It seems only a few people have the courtesy to critique but would like the critiques on their own. I am new here, and originally was excited about this site. If you are one who DOES regularly read and comment on others work, then may the Lord bless you mightily and publish you quickly.
Wow! I'm not into poetry but read this aloud and delighted in its perfection - both in sound and in story. Truth! Well-done.
I agree, this is brilliant. Genius in rhythm and rhyme. Horrible in the story of innocence lost. Powerful with the call of a Savior, Jesus, to restore a hope and a future.
Yes. Definitely brilliant. It's perfect.
I must applaud this dramatic verse, almost like a song. Its rhythms call to the heart, to lure the sweet innocent to places of lonely despair. At last her true love captures her heart, almost too late...but not. He knows how to redeem! Great job!