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Great use of dialogue to move the action along. It definitely pulled me in!
This is a nicely written little story. Now we need to find out what chapter two will bring.
What a beautiful story. You did well at letting us feel the emotion of the father and daughter relationship with this challenge between them.

I love when I see God working on people and it looks like he was working on the dad.

My intrigue is peaked as I wonder what could have happened to have one family boycott another.

Beginning of a book, maybe?
This was a pleasure to read. No bumps.
Like the days of old (Isaac vs. Ishmael and Esau vs. Jacob) feuds have been fought between and within families.

I like how the dialog revealed much about the characters.