The Official Writing Challenge
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10/18/18
Ah - memories! Thanks for sharing this sweet piece. It tends to ramble just a bit and could be tightened up. I enjoyed this, it made me chuckle - keep writing. God bless!
10/19/18
I enjoyed your voice in this piece and your thoughts about wasted words and breaths. I think you could have started out with that idea and so made the piece more cohesive.