The Official Writing Challenge
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Great job communicating the difficulties you have faced and the lessons you learned. The pain and hope shown through the writing.

My only red ink is to eliminate unnecessary words. In the intro you write that these things "sometimes" come at inconvenient moments. You could leave out the word "sometimes" since I don't know that there is ever a convenient time for trials...
This is an important story and you tell it well. What I hope is constructive critique is referencing the writing only - not the experience. Proofreading is needed and the story would fit the assignment better if your conclusion had a 'weather' metaphor that tied in with your first paragraph. But the challenge of patiently caring for your wife is much more important than a Writing Challenge. May God give you all you need for the fruits of the Spirit to grow in you and feed your wife.
Sorry for the challenges your wife's illness has bestowed on you but I'm blessed by your ever present holding on to hope in this storm of life.