The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/18
Good job developing the story and the choice of the mc.
The first sentence felt a little awkward but otherwise I enjoyed how the story flowed together.
07/31/18
Convicting.
07/31/18
A good challenge about our
selfishness when others are
in difficulty.
I love that your MC overcame feelings of 'self' to honour her commitment to help others. I agree your first sentence felt a little awkward but easily fixed if broken into two shorter sentences (30+ words is a bit unwieldy). The dialogue worked well, too.