The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/18
Great job with the story telling. You had me right at the beginning.

My only note -- a preference really -- would be to work on the presentation, with more spaces between the paragraphs in the middle.
07/31/18
Really liked this line: Jesus had been so good to her in that awful place, like a friend really. That relationship seemed to be the focus more than prodigal father.
07/31/18
As I read this I was scared for Binky as she appeared to have gotten herself in over her head in her perception of her relationship with Todd.

Showing that her dilemma gave her thoughts of God is all too often a common reaction when life is tough.

Good conclusion.