The Official Writing Challenge
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I chuckled throughout the reading. Haven’t we all been in a situation like that? I thoroughly enjoyed the writing and the style. Excellent!
06/07/18
Great job telling the story through the inner dialogue of the MC. I enjoyed seeing the progress of her thoughts.

I may be looking at this through too literal/practical of a lens, but I found myself wondering about the organization and coordination of this event. Each role seemed completely independent of each other, with no overarching vision that they were operating under.
06/11/18
This is so well written! Your transitions from moment to moment are so effortless.

I only wish my revelations of my own self-serving actions were brought to my attention as gently as with your MC. God typically ends up having to run me over with a truck to get me back on track. :)

Great work!