The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/17
Such a very heartbreaking situation! Good job with the dialogue.
For some red ink, there seemed to be an inconsistency with how far along she was in her pregnancy. The statement at the beginning with the doctor telling her there was no turning back would tend to suggest she was farther along while the statement about just finding out and about her still flat stomach suggest she is still in the very early stages.
This was a moving story about love that would grow. I was wondering whether you based it on Ruth in the Bible.
10/24/17
Oh my, what heavy decisions to be made. I love how you added more details as you went along, A beautiful story.
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