The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved the last line, and "Laughter bounded up the stairs." Red ink wise, her family seems a little too perfect. Maybe there could have been some tension with one of them? I also enjoyed the "Yam"joke. You pulled it off well.
Good job presenting the challenge of moving overseas away from family. The bit about the shoes was a nice way of bringing it together.
This fit the topic perfectly. All that sole searching for God's will vs leaving your family. Great ending.
good story and on target, enjoyed it.
I liked this well written family life story in drama form. We will have to wait a year to hear the conclusion.

Nice going.
Congratulations on ranking 3rd in your level and 19 overall. Happy Dance!