The Official Writing Challenge
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07/20/17
Loved this whole piece!
Blessings~
07/23/17
Great job setting up and showing the nature of this family and their change at the end. I enjoyed the description of the woods outside their cabin.
It seemed to stop to soon and the reader did not find out if there was any resolution to the problem that was meant to be solved.

This might just be the opening chapter, though, to your story.
I enjoyed thinking about what was happening in this family, and you did a great job of showing, not telling. It did come to a fast close though, with really just a paragraph or two supplying the resolution. I would have found it more satisfying if I'd had more time to experience their new-found togetherness. It's difficult with only 750 words!
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