The Official Writing Challenge
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06/15/17
Blessed Assurance -- one of my favorite hymns. Thanks for the reminder of who our assurance is. God bless.
I can feel your pain. The verse in Because He Lives is my favorite as well and has gotten me through so many tough times. The words Because He Lives is on my Mom's headstone.

I hate to give constructive criticism because I sense you wrote this because you needed to. When I write about true events, everything is ingrained in my head and all feels so important. However, I've learned the reader doesn't need every detail that is important to me. I think some of this feels a bit disjointed because of that. The bus ride and no nurse is probably ingrained in your memory, but not necessarily helps move the story along.

With that said, your words still touched my heart. I've avoided my mom's grave for years, but today I'm going to venture out I think. July 4th was her favorite holiday and has been a hard day for me, yet your words have touched me so deeply. Instead of mourning her, I'm going to celebrate her life.