The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a romantic yet sad story. I think you did a great job of writing on topic. You painted a great picture for me. My only red ink is the thoughts would probably be in present tense not past. (Now he's leaving for 6 months.)
I thought for sure she was trying to tell him that she loved him. I like your ending better. The message is profound.