The Official Writing Challenge
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03/18/17
You began in a super way. Good hook. Had me wanting to read on. I am not sure how the topic will be handled by the judges. It certainly had issues of childhood that causes harm, maybe I am off base. It had a good story like that needed much more. You could have used the rest of the word number allotted to expand on your story. It had great possibilities with more in depth dialogue and leading to a good conclusion. A few punctuation and capitalization issues. It was interesting and hope you take these pointers to heart. I want to read more of your stuff. God bless.