The Official Writing Challenge
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03/09/17
The glories of sanctification. Imaginatively written.
03/10/17
Well done, good job with this piece!

Blessings~
03/11/17
I enjoyed reading this as it kept my interest right until the end. A clever moral revealed at the end too. Well done!
03/11/17
Super job. I really enjoyed your imagination. You kept my interest. I would have like to see it have a better hook. Rather than tell us right off that the thrust of the story was about arguing and complaining. Let us guess until you show us in dialogue as you did later. The suspense would have added depth to it. It flowed nicely and came to a good conclusion. Job well done. It's a winner in my book.
I like it, I really do. Get someone to produce a few pictures to go with it and produce a self published booklet story.

Nice. It has a quality theme that would good for young people to think about.
Congratulations on ranking 4th in your level and 20 overall. Happy Dance.