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It's amazing how dependent we all are on technology.
Some good thoughts and points. We all need to fast on a lot of things, not only tech. You had me at first with the wrinkled hand touching you, but then I thought it went too predictable. The ending was, in my opinion, a little weak. Hope this helps and keep them coming. I want to read more of your stuff.
Great job presenting a very relevant struggle in today's world. It remains a daily challenge for me. :)
I understand your intent & message, I wish there had been more of the story on the ups & downs of the family as they worked to find an acceptable balance of life with and without their devices and less of the statements in the middle. Show me with action & dialogue how the family found a real balance with their devices. The story had a good start & the dialogue well written. More of that please. We could all use a lesson in finding that balance, right?