The Official Writing Challenge
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02/13/17
I find the ending hilarious. Very realistic. Great job!
You did a great job of writing on topic in a fresh, interesting way. Your pacing felt spot on, especially in the middle. The beginning dialog didn't quite feel urgent enough to me, but as the dialog moved me through the story, it definitely became more intense. Your ending was great too. It made me smile and left me feeling satisfied. Congratulations on ranking 2nd in your level and 18 overall. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
Congratulations on your rankings! This was a great, fast-paced read, though I suspected the happy ending, but I prefer those anyway. :) I didn't pick up Janice's name shift to Candace until the second read.