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This is a charming story that definitely fits the topic. I can't imagine how frantic I might be if my child ran away.

You did a nice job of highlighting the anxiety of the parents, but in my opinion, the poetry made it feel less serious than the situation would warrant. I picture parents unable to sleep, staring at phone, checking to make sure it works. The poetry, in my opinion, came across too whimsical. But that could just be me as poetry isn't my strongest suit.

Your story tells a horror that many parents today face, and so many don't have that happy ending. It reminded me to stop and pray for runaways and their families.
This is a charming story that definitely fits the topic. I can't imagine how frantic I might be if my child ran away.

You did a nice job of highlighting the anxiety of the parents, but in my opinion, the poetry made it feel less serious than the situation would warrant. I picture parents unable to sleep, staring at phone, checking to make sure it works. The poetry, in my opinion, came across too whimsical. But that could just be me as poetry isn't my strongest suit.

Your story tells a horror that many parents today face, and so many don't have that happy ending. It reminded me to stop and pray for runaways and their families.