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I liked how the story started right off with a conflict. I could feel the angst of the MC and can totally relate. I don't like to invite people in because my house isn't how I'd like it to be.

The ending surprised me some. I liked how considerate the friend was, but felt a tad bit disappointed that the MC didn't necessarily agree with her friend that Jo needed time. I get that drinking beer and sharing a bed before marriage isn't what most Christians would consider appropriate, but felt sad that Jo might never really get to know Jesus. Although it's a really thin line and hard for many to balance. It's definitely easy to get pulled down with a nonbeliever.

I think you did a nice job of covering the topic. This story is definitely one that will make readers think, and that is a good thing. Even if everyone doesn't agree (and when does that ever happen?), it's a great piece that makes one examine her own heart. You did a nice job of developing the characters and the dialog added depth to them. Overall, this was a great read.
11/16/16
Shannon said it all! It would be hard to deal with and hard to explain--the friendship. Good that the friends didn't judge, as many Christians would. But the friends handled the situation as Jesus would have. Only God is the Judge. And He leaves the outcome to the person/persons concerned. ...Blessings, Helen
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