The Official Writing Challenge
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Even though poetry is not my strongest or most favorite genre, I really liked this. I'm tone deaf, so not an expert on rhythm but most lines seemed to flow to my ears. There were a couple were it may have been off tempo a bit, but I'm not positive. I think the idea behind the poem is pure artistic genius. It's so clever to link writing with the seasons. It really resonated in my heart and I found myself tearing up at times.

I did notice a few tiny things like cleverer sounds odd to me. I'd say more clever, but I looked it up to be sure and both are deemed acceptable. It should be than not then though.
Also tear-stained face needs a hyphen because you are connecting the two words to make one adjective.

I think the ending is powerful, and I can easily hear God speaking those words to me. You've really touched my heart. I think you wrote on topic in a fresh and interesting way. Your message is subtle, yet once it sinks in, it's powerful. We so want to be in control, but God does such a wonderful job. We need to give him our pens. Great writing.
11/03/16
Congratulations Wendy on your EC which is well deserved for this lovely poem. I found it moving and well crafted.
Congratulations! Happy Dance!
11/07/16
Congratulations, Wendy, for 2nd place winner. I like and write poetry. Yours is clever and different. As another has pointed out--a few small errors. But as any writer knows, it is easy to have "eye pass-overs" in your own writing. We concentrate on the message first. Details often take a minor roll...Anyway, I like your poem...Blessings, Helen
11/29/16
This is one of my favorite pieces of poetry I've had the honor of reading on the site. There were a few minor flaws which is why you may not have ranked even higher in the EC.
Congratulations are still in order! Well done, perhaps just proof one more time...

12/08/16
Congratulations, Wendy, on winning an EC award on this well crafted piece of poetry. I was so engrossed in the power of your words that I didn't even notice the tiny errors mentioned before me.